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Why Anglo Saxon rules (in business writing anyway)

24th
Apr
by Sarah Turner

When it comes to business writing or copywriting, it’s always better to use Anglo Saxon words rather than Latin words. But why are Anglo Saxon words better? And how can we tell the difference?

To find out, let’s take a brief look at the history of the English language.

What have the Romans ever done for us?
Latin words have been around in England since the days of the Roman Empire. But things started hotting up when the Anglo Saxons arrived in the 5th Century bringing their Germanic based language with them.

The French invasion. Mon Dieu  
A mixture of Latin and Anglo Saxon words, known as Old English, were used until the Norman Conquest in 1066, when a flood of French words came into the English language and were used by the aristocracy and well-educated. Of course, French itself is derived from Latin, and the English language became a mixture of French words like barber, tailor, butcher, mason, and carpenter, and down to earth Anglo Saxon words like beard, hair, cloth, meat, stone and wood.

Et cetera, et cetera
During the Middle Ages, many scientific, scholarly and legal terms were borrowed from Latin. And by the 17th and 18th centuries, scholars and intellectuals, wishing to improve the English language, created new English words from Latin words such as fraternity, from the Latin fraternitas, an improvement, they thought, on the Anglo Saxon brotherhood.

So why choose Anglo Saxon words over Latin? They seem a bit crude compared to the flowery elegance of Latin derived words. Well they are. But Anglo Saxon words also tend to be shorter, punchier and more direct; whereas Latin words tend to be longer and more abstract.   

I’m not saying strip your writing of Latin words altogether. But if you’re writing a business letter or sales copy, and you need to get to your point across as quickly and as easily as possible, Anglo Saxon is the way to go.

Some Latin derived words and their simpler alternatives

Adamant – firm
Adjacent – near
Ascertain – to find out
Capacious – large
Collaborate – work together
Contemplative – thoughtful
Equitable – just, fair
Incognito – disguised
Loquacious – talkative
Novel – new and unusual
Pallid – pale
Parsimonious - thrifty 
Penchant – like 
Pernicious – causing great harm

Some Anglo Saxon words that have been around a while   
Almost, All, And, As, At
By, But
For, From, Friendly
King
Middle, More, Most
Some, Such
Ten, This
Was, Were, Word
Year

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If this is the solution, what was the problem?

3rd
Apr
by Sarah Turner

I hate the word solution. I really do. It’s now so over-used it has lost all its meaning. Lunch solutions? Right. That would be a sandwich then. Or how about plumbing solutions? Got it. You’re a plumber. Or spotted on a bin in Glasgow the other weekend: ‘Providing refuse solutions’.

But my favourite, seen on a website this week, ‘Contemporary quality solutions to light control’. Yes people. We are talking about a blind.

And why we’re at it turn-key is really awful as well. As is one-stop shop. And the word user. The one-stop shop for turnkey solutions for users. Good grief.

Even Wikipedia agrees. Here’s what they say.

The word solution should be confined to its use in chemistry, mathematics and problem solving. It should not be used to refer to products, services, software or a combination of these things, since such usage implies that the product or service solves the problem it is intended to solve: the word “solution” should instead be replaced by a concrete descriptive term for the type of product, such as “software”. Solution often is used simply as a buzzword that can be eliminated altogether with no loss of meaning

Dubious use:

  • “The company offers web hosting solutions for e-business…” Instead say “The company offers web hosting for e-business…” (if that is what it does).

Acceptable use:

  • “A solution of sodium chloride in water…”
  • “The solution to the chess problem involves the sacrifice of the knight…”
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How to improve your writing technique in 7 simple steps

26th
Mar
by Sarah Turner

We’ve all been there. It’s called blank page syndrome. It’s that feeling you get when you’ve been asked to write a report, a press release, a case study or a sales letter. But after 20 minutes you’ve only typed two words on the page; and that was your name. 

So where do you start? What technique can you use to get the creative juices flowing? What plan can you use to ensure you include all the information you need? What system can you use to make sure your writing is sharp, concise and error free?  

I’ll tell you. It’s called The Process. And it consists of 7 simple steps. Check it out.

Think about your audience  
Ask yourself: Who am I writing this for? What do they do for a living? What do they want to read? What do they worry about? What makes them happy? Type a description of this person at the top of your page. Give them a name. This is the person you’re going to write for. 

Think about your objectives   
Ask yourself: What do I want this document to do? What’s its purpose? To inform? To get somebody excited? Create a buzz? Convince?

What you want your document to do is known as the ‘function statement’. Type at the top of your page: ‘I want this piece to confirm/identify/highlight/announce/compare/clarify/ summarise/notify/recommend’.

Brainstorm
Ok, I know the word brainstorm is not PC. But you get the drift. What’s the one thing you absolutely must include? What do you need to tell your reader to convince, persuade, reassure them? This is your key message. Type it on your page.

Then write anything that comes into your head: ideas, words, sentences, false starts. This helps you get in the ‘zone’.

Write an outline
Once you’ve got all your information, start to organise and evaluate. Write your headings and number them. Be logical about this. Remember you need to make your document as easy as possible for your reader to understand. Your headings might not be used in the final document, but they’ll help you with your planning.

Write the first draft
Ok, get writing. Take a look at your outline and notes and start to write a first draft. It’s sometimes easier to write the summary and conclusion or the introduction and call to action first, and then fill in the middle chunk afterwards. Don’t agonise over grammar and punctuation at this stage. Just get it down. Let the words flow.

Edit your draft  
This is the fun bit. And probably the most important part of the process. Firstly, take a break. Ideally overnight. But certainly a couple of hours if you can. This will help you look at what you’ve written with a critical eye. 

Print out your document; it’s easy to miss something on screen. Read carefully through your work. Really read it. Does it do the job? Remember the objective you typed at the top of the page earlier.  

Check your structure. Have you got the information in the right order? Is it logical? Does the story flow? Move sentences and paragraphs around so your points are made more clearly. 

Check your sentence length. Can that sentence be shorter? Shorter still? (On average your sentences should be 15-20 words.) Make sure there’s only one idea per sentence. Remember the message you’re trying to communicate. Remember the people you’re talking to.

Check your punctuation. Check your grammar. Check your facts. Make sure you’ve used an active voice. Use plain English.

How’s it looking? Print it out, check it, and edit again.

And finally…proofread your work
You’re nearly done. The last part of The Process is proofreading. Here are a few ways to proofread what you’ve written.

Print out your document and read it out loud. This is a good way to catch missing words or double words.

Read from the bottom of the page backwards. And read paragraphs out of order. This technique stops you being distracted by the meaning of the words and is a good way of spotting typos.   

Work with a ruler, keeping it just below the line you’re reading. This forces you to slow down and focus on each word.  

Touch each word with the tip of a pencil. This will make you read more slowly and will help you spot mistakes.

Remember to make sure your formatting is consistent. And if you’ve used speech marks or brackets make sure they’re in pairs. And finally, check dates, people and companies. Are they right? Are they spelt correctly? 

Phew. Done? Print it out and check it again.

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Cut the bull from your press releases. Please

26th
Feb
by Sarah Turner

I was amused by a letter in this week’s Design Week, in which Richard Murray, of London’s Williams Murray Hamm, grumbles about the rubbishy press releases he receives from design consultants.

He complains of meaningless statements like ‘the brighter red feels more contemporary’. And refers to ‘merging the word Air and France asserts Air France’s international status while preserving its traditional values’ as “absolute c**k”.

Murray goes on to say that “if this is how we talk about what we do, it’s no surprise the design industry often struggles to be taken seriously.”

Yep, couldn’t agree more. Some press releases I see are appalling. Not only are they uninteresting, unstructured, full of industry bull and right up themselves, they’re also littered with punctuation and grammar errors.

If your PR agency is churning out this sort of nonsense you might want to think about changing your PR agency. Just sayin’.

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When’s the best time to send a sales email?

22nd
Feb
by Sarah Turner

Interesting question this.

It’s generally thought the best time to send a sales email is between 10.00am and 10.30am and between 1.00pm and 1.30pm Tuesday to Thursday.

Monday is out of the question. Too many other things to deal with. Friday, forget it. No-one is thinking about work on a Friday. In the UK the weekend starts on a Thursday night. The only time you can send a sales email on a Friday is if you work for a holiday firm or a brewery.

So Tuesday to Thursday seems like a good bet. 10.00am allows people to have checked their early morning emails, looked at Facebook, and written a tweet. 1.00pm and you’re catching them in a post-lunch good mood.

But wait. There are things that are beyond your control. How is your server set up? You may press send at 10.00am but your emails may take hours to filter through. Or how about different time zones? Are you in Europe and sending sales emails to the US or Australia? Your sales emails will probably arrive in the middle of the night.

The important thing is to test. And keep a record of the time your sales emails were opened or replied to. Find out what works. And do more of it.

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